Submission date : 2009-10-22
Michael D Nalley ( F P C D )
This gives more support to my theory about a void. Perhaps even feelings of rejection
I find it hard to love your pseudo friends as I believe you should
Once in a Lifetime ( F C D )
Your expression is beautiful Val.
I don't want you to feel like this though.
I want you to know I'll always be here for you no matter what ok Val?
I Bruise Easily ( F C D )
Wow, that last line was very unexpected and it caught me offguard, very well done. the only improvements i would suggest, is toning it down, for a poem like this, less is more.good work. IBE
Nik ( F P C D )
This was such a touching piece. Your words are so vivid and really make me feel what you're feeling. Like IBE said the last line sis very hard hitting and almost reminds me of a little kid crying after it's mom. Very sad but powerful piece. Keep it up. Nik