Feel Free to rate and comment my poems.... and if you have any suggestion then please tell me...

I have a few suggestions if you don't mind me saying...

When I read the first stanza I thought it was good but there was something about I knew was wrong. When I studied it I realized it's because you kept changing tenses. some of the lines are in present tense and some are in past tense. If I changed it all to past tense it would read like this:
"A game
A glutted feed for me
A presser
A bite by my fangs
dried your whole blood
and turned your life
changed you forever..."
Other than that it was really good. I still give it a 5/5

Yeah I agree with GothicVampyress on this. It was dark, once again, but the way she changed it in her comment, made the poem look and sound much better. Id take her suggestion.
i still gave it a 5/5

This was a good poem, however, I noticed that you changed tenses. You need to focus on making sure that you have all the tenses correct. IT was a great poem. though.

This one was good but not as good as the others, in my opinion, interesting job

A game
A glutted feed for me
A presser
A bit by my fangs
dry your whole blood
and turned your life
change you forever...
^^very descriptive and true i read a lot of books about vampires so i enjoy your analogies

A smack
A hit by my head
A sketch
A cut by my nails
take your beauty
and in the end
You will be Fee-faw-fum
^^i love the last line it made me smile

: ) another great poem!! 5/5

Wow, I can really feel the emotion in this poem. Amazing job.

Hmm.. very dark, i like it.

Romantically dark and delightfully original