I like it. It was dark but at the same time it was seemingly a love poem...You've managed to write a very intriguing piece. I loved the words you used and the imagery that you have portrayed.

I really like the way you ended the poem, it was very abrupt and striking. Also, I am a fan of the title because it was 'of' the poem but not necesarily 'in' the poem...If that makes sense?

Anyway, the only suggestion I would make would be to lengthen this piece. Keep the ending as it is but add more in the middle...Apart from that its all good. 5/5

Alyssa. x

One word wow! that was amazing!!!! the feeling in it is incredible i love it it rocks and well its just really good!

It was excellent, I must say that once again it was written in a unique sytle. Very picturesque

Dark and kind of twisted I like it! 5/5

Beautiful
5/5

xx

Its ok i guess

"Its a night of darkness, a song of sorrow,
wolves vent their loneliness. The beautiful one
rises."

Wow, this honestly took my breath away. You really know how to caputre the reader's mind and intrigue them, this grabbed my attention right away, beautiful wording..

"Her Black hair cascades over
fragile milk-white shoulders, and her
full blood red lips part slightly, to taste the
blood streaming form the
pale flesh beneath
her."

The descriptions here are outstanding! I love how you say "fragile milk-white shoulders", this really left me speechless, and you gave the reader a clear image of everything you wrote about, nicely done. Definetly a pleasure to read, this poem is sure extraordinary, keep it up! Take care, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever....

Wow what vivid descriptions you have here. I could imagine each scene flawlessly in my mind. Great choice of words and it flowed nicely throughout. Although it was short, it packed a lot of power.

Well done.
*5/5*

Its a night of darkness, a song of sorrow,
wolves vent their loneliness. The beautiful one
rises.
^^who is the beautiful one? ((curiosity))

Evil shrouds her walking form,
a timeless wanting.

Her Black hair cascades over
fragile milk-white shoulders, and her
full blood red lips part slightly, to taste the
blood streaming form the
pale flesh beneath
her.
^^ you portray it in a very sexy and attractive way

Now a night of darkness,
I remember her.
^^you get the reader to really imagine it!

Great job! 5/5

Wow, this one is EXCELENT. The emotion is absolutely amazing. Very well done.

The emotion displayed here is really amazing.
Vampyrism is one of my favorite subjects
I want it to be real 5/5

Its dar poem,though it showed some feelings,i liked the end most :)

Now a night of darkness,
I remember her.

5/5

Its a night of darkness, a song of sorrow,

*I would make this line two lines. I think it would flow better that way*

wolves vent their loneliness. The beautiful one
rises.

*I love this part. it has a sort of lingering sadness when I read it. It's easy to relate to. Very emotional without saying too much. Nice way to open your piece*

Evil shrouds her walking form,
a timeless wanting.

*This was my favorite part I think. The word "shrouds" is perfect here. I don't I've read many poems with that word in it.*

Her Black hair cascades over

*Love that you used the word "cascades" here makes it seem like a waterfall or something*

fragile milk-white shoulders, and her
full blood red lips part slightly, to taste the
blood streaming form the

*Should "form" be "from"? Other than that I love the imagery here. Not dark but more beautiful and almost peaceful. I could really picture every word in my head and that's very important in a piece so small*

pale flesh beneath
her.

Now a night of darkness,
I remember her.

*This was a lovely piece. Not sure why you put it with the dark ones, but I did enjoy it. It was a sad story but your imagery made it so beautiful and elegant to me. I really enjoyed this piece. Keep it up dear :) Nik*

Well...this was a good poem, lots of imagery in it...nothing more can be said..it is perfect as it is:)

God bless,

5/5 Ingrid

I enjoyed this one! the imagery was very good. it held my interest and left me wondering. a definate 5.

Now this is by far the greatest poem I have read of yours! Great job with the emotion and imagery! Amazing write. 5/5 :)

The flow really stands out as does the dark imagery

Ok great job!! i really wish it was a bit longer tho i mean i would love to get to read more of your poems they seem to be a bit to short but the subject is really cool and the mystery in your words is really compelling great job!!