Angel

Wow, it is just so toching and you were so creative and sensitive, keep it up noha

Aw!!..this was really sweet.
you had some spelling mistakes , but i totaly overlooked that . the poem was absolutly fab.
5/5
Aly

This poem has very strong touching emotion. Also Here Are Some Possible Changes You Could Do:

I missed you, when you are not around
^ Instead of missed put miss or you or you can write i missed you, when you weren't around

i just cry , i wonder why?
^ very weak, maybe you could change it too I start To Cry, And I Dont Know Why

then i just realized,
my tears just come out searching for you.
you are in my eyes,
^ Could Be changed to then i fianlly realized, my tears had come searching for you, as you are my eyes. Something along those lines.

i know how you scared of darkness,
thats why i keep it open .
with you i find my way ,
i find my happiness.
^ Maybe Change to i know you are scared of darkness. & Maybe you can tell hte reader what exactly is open .

if time is an ocean,
then i would spend every drop for you.
if time is a drop,
then i will spend every ocean on you.
when I'm angry ,
^ Spend maybe could be replaced with a better suited word

In general you need to pay attention to how things sound and punctuation because it takes away from the poems emotion which really could of come across great.

3/5

Thanks for your comment i will think about this

I really did like this poem. I got it, but parts of it don't make sense with how it's worded. You have great emotion in it, though.

And, I'd try stanzas, eh. It's your work but this is my suggestion;

I miss you when you're not around,
I just cry - I wonder why:
Then I realize, that it's my tears . . .
coming out in search of you.

You are in my eyes -
I know how you're scared of darkness,
which is why I keep it open.
With you I find my way,
I find my happiness.

If time were an ocean,
I would spend every drop for you.
If time were a drop,
I would spend every ocean on you.

When I'm angry, you know
exactly what to do.
You just smile and. . .
my anger loses the battle.

I want to spend my day with you,
which I wish was my entire life.
Yet, if we can only talk at night -
I wouldn't mind my life being dark.

How can I say - You're an angel
without the halo and wings or
An angel is you with halo and wings.