I could feel the intensity of this piece and your emotions were expressed very clearly. A very well written piece and a 5/5 for sure.

I really like this poem because it really shows how you feel about school. It was well written and flowed decently. Great concept! 5/5

(you wrote "quite" instead of "quiet" just so you know :P)

That was so sad...i will be your friend or if you need someone to talk to, i am always here. i know how it feels to be left outside the crowd, one day it seems like all fine but then its just like a bloody nightmare. i could feel all the emotion in it. dont worry things will get better. keep that head up high. keep a smile on your face even if its broken, a smile is a smile and a smile helps you find the strength you need it might not seem but it will. I love this poem!!!!

CourtneyxHolland
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5/5!!

The poem flows well in a poppy bouncy way when you read it. Which is weird with the theme of the poem but I suppose that doesn't really matter. Good write, keep up the good work.
-Alex

Waw so sad so good poem, great feeling i think we all feel it sometimes but you write it nicly 5/5

I love it because it has a real feel

I hope your not going thru it for real though

Its soo real and soo sad. i love it , cuz i can relate to it .

Very well expressed.
I couldn't really feel the emotion as well as others did.
But.
It was still there.
Excellent work!

Nawww.. it reminds me of someone.. it is so true alot of quite people are like it.. but then u get the people who do it on there lower leg.. and wear a mini skirt the next day just to show people how they feel hoping to get a response from a guy she likes.. but he ignores it.. but she tells everyone.. he didnt ignore it and made a deal.. he wont make a deal cos she does it agian when u do.. but yea.. it is always the quite one

Hey

i love this not too long but not too short
ummm i know i shouldnt talk but bleeding isnt the way to go
if you need to let your feelings out pm me
cuz even though i dont really know you i dont want anyone to be hurting... excluding myself

ill be here if you need me
-miranda

Thats really good well done x

Your poem was really good:]

I hope that everything goes better for you.

That summed up my old life, perfectually.
i honestly (don't wanna sound harsh) but think you have enough talent to up your game, make it a little longer, and add a few more expressive words here and there. your telling a story which has been told a thousand times, add your own twist and style, its how you get from being to from a good writer to a great writer (i'm not a great writer and never will be btw.)

i hope that kind of helped as you asked for critism :]

but all together, its a good little poem, just a few wee changes will help amy x

That Is A Reeli Gudd Poem...
I Like The Endin On that One Yanow...
Hha,,, Hopee Yu Dont Act Do That Thow COz That Wudd Bee Silly x=D

This is great i love how it rhymes 5/5