Good bye

by sweet escape   Mar 21, 2008


Good bye to you once again.
You, the one I once called friend.
My heart, broken beyond repair.
You left me in so much despair.
I gave you all the love I had to give,
and without your love I can not live!

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  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    It was short, but it held more than the previous poem I had commented did. I quite liked it.

    I'm in so much despair.
    `I feel you should edit that line. It was too short compared to the others -- again, syllabication -- and broke the flow .

    The last couple of lines, were (very) similar to the lines in the other poems I read, and that kind of made me frown. But it was good .

    --..MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by Anthony Duvalle

    Excellent I just wish there was more to it and a little bit more description

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This was really good. I thought it was very deep. However I also think this poem could be amazing, if you lengethened it...

    Still good though,
    5/5 --Elly.

  • 16 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Another sad poem. Wow, this is just simple but amazingly great. Another 5/5 for you!!! Keep writing!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by FallingAngel

    Nice very emotional and awsome job. Though it might be better if they were longer:) but good job just the same.

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