Try adding more imagination to your poem!
and make it a little bit longer...

This is very sweet, however, i dont think its quite finished. great potential tho!

It's a nice beginning...but I agree you could do much more with it. Let your imagination run free and don't be afraid of what others will think of the result. You might be surprised with what you end up with :)

Great job!5/5

I THINK I AGREE WITH THE FIRST PERSON WHO COMMENTED, BUT IF U DO SO IT WOULD BE A NOVEL. =]

Beautifully written, i use 2 relate 2 this poem but can't now. well, great work, 5/5
xoxo
~waiting~