Dear Lord,

I think that the poem was good but you could do some things to make it better. message me and i will write it all down and tell you how you could make it better

Good try mate.
try to ryme though

Edit:
Second line, first stanza, you ended a sentence so the O in oh should be capitalized.
The for in the third line isn't really needed since you already ended a sentence. If you want to keep it I advise to exchanged the ! for a ,. That's just what I'd do though so it doesn't really matter.
Once again focus on capitalizing letters when they need to be.
You mean it is true that I have sinned. Just add an ned on the end of sin. Unless of course you actually mean that you have sin. I think you mean that you have sinned before though. Whatever you wish.
That don't stop you should be That doesn't stop you.

Ah I see you took my advice on adding a little comment at the end of the poem requesting for edits and such. :) Or as that someone else I told to do that? Oh well, splah. :D

Good comments:
It was a nice little tribute to the big man upstairs. I like the title. Since there was no rhyming I don't have to grade on that so I don't have to look for rhyming consistency. :) Yay you!

Rating:
4. It wasn't my type of poem but since there wasn't anything really bad for me to say about it, I don't see why it doesn't deserve a four. It didn't wrap me in like I wished it would have.