Forevermore.

by Mackenzie   Apr 5, 2008


I love you more,
Than words can say.
You are the only one
that brightens my rainy day.

When the clouds cover
the Sun away up high.
I just look up to the heavens,
and you clear all from the sky.

I trusted you with all,
of my heart and soul.
And now I have a rainy day.
And the clouds you will not roll.

So here I am, once again,
with nothing left in store.
With a cloudy, rainy day.
That will remain forevermore.

**i would like all the critism i can get.**

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  • 17 years ago

    by 0oAshleyo0

    This is very good!
    some of the times i didnt get the flow, but it still worked out great!
    great job!

    XxAshleyxX

  • 17 years ago

    by HisBaby54

    I liked this one A LOT. short but cute :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Very very good!
    grreat flow
    nice rhyming : )
    the only thing i could ever even think of to give you as criticism would be just find more complex vocab to use
    but i like how this one was worded : ) 5/5 <33

  • 17 years ago

    by writeXlovexonxherXarms

    I loveddd it :]
    it's cutee
    good job<3
    r/r/c

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