I'm sensing a narrator who deeply misses the high and low times of having children in their home. It was cute that you could sense the sadness, and I wish you could have expanded one more stanza at the least to show the lonlyness of forgotten pitter patter. Like the transistion to the teen world of, "Go away" and talking on the phone and the slamming of the doors, and the mother watching the pitter patter fade away.

Aw. sherry..they'll still love you. even when they're old and grey. they'll still need you. their pitter patter may be a bit louder (lol) but those feet will still come running home to mom.

alone at last I shall be
never forgetting; yet, reminiscing
pitter patters of little feet

^ definitely loved the ending. bittersweet, which is great.

5/5

I would expect no less from a skilled and beautiful poet inside and out I would not change a thing

Very touching piece, filled with excellently expressed heartfelt feelings. I like the atmosphere that you created a lot, it is deeply captivating. This poem is equally beautiful and sad, portrayed with wonderful elegance.
The flow of the whole poem seem flawless, and I think that you did a good job with rhymes.
I like the topic of the piece, too.
Greatly done, Sherry :)
My favorite stanza is:

- Pitter patters of little feet
no longer run beneath
little ones now grown older
home nowadays seems so much colder-
^^^
Greatly written opening stanza, it pulled me straight into this piece.

Keep up!

It makes me think about now in my life.
I'm just about out of my parents house, but I don't want my departure to be of sadness for them, but pride.

It makes me want to talk to my parents about this time in our lives.

That was a beautidul way of describing children growing up and moving on to bigger and better things. I loved how you tied the beginning and ending with the title .. it was quite effective in getting your message across. The flow was flawless and as a whole the poem was a nice read. Well done *5/5*

Wow! Jam-packed with emotions!

Those pitter-paters will echo in your heart forever, hon :)

This is a beautiful poem! So heartfelt and beautifully written.. I can really get a sense of how much you miss having little children in your home..

I love you use of the phrase "pitter patters" .. it really does a lot for the poem!

little ones now grown older
home nowadays seems so much colder
^^ Those 2 lines are really sad and they make you think about time and how people grow older and move on .. and things begin to change.. it's a really sad and depressing thought..

soon they will each move on
one by one they will be gone
^^ Another sad thought.. I can respond to that from the other side.. from a child's point of view ..I'm away at college right now and I actually miss being home.. i hate being away from my family so I can relate to this poem a lot but from the other side..

You did a great job writing about this. Just these few stanzas say so much about life..

5/5 =)

Beautiful poem, wow, you said so much with just three stanzas... I honestly think that core of this piece is priceless, title is also very captivating and your writing is creative in each line ,you kept my attention through whole poem. You expressed emotions excellently and what impressed me most of all is the fact that you managed to touch me so much with such simple but remarkable writing. Message of this piece is also great and you used so original topic.
Bravo, overall I honestly admire your ability to write something which is this moving and beautiful, excellently done.

That was beautiful, I love your word choice, it definately enhances the poem. It reminds me of how much I miss my own youth and being young, and at the same time it reminds me of how passing this life is so it makes me want to hold on and cherish it even more.

little ones now grown older
home nowadays seems so much colder
^^
These lines make me REALLY feel like it's me who misses them.

Sherry,
This piece was absolutely beautiful. Really a heart wrenching and warming piece at the same time. You've portrayed such beautiful saddness into this poem with the fact that your children have grown up now and are moving on in life, yet at the same time your thoughts are going back into the past where innocence once was, and that, that really warms my heart. Whilst reading this, it reminded me of being a young child again and still having my siblings living at home. I definitly could relate to this piece in my own little way. Your word choice was stunning and created a nice effect. This poem definitly moved me, Short and simple yet it still played deeply with my heart strings. I admire you for writing this piece and i'll definitly be showing it to my mother who i'm sure can relate to this. Thankyou for warming my heart with this gem of a poem. Take care and keep on writing so I can keep on reading. ~Mel

A wonderful sound, I remember very vividly.

Reminds me of young children. which you obviously tried to capture the idea of.
I can relate to the poem on a child's view, since i still live at home and still battling middle school.

where did all our time go
from whence they first said hello?
wishing once more for preschool years
even missing their nightmares

I like how you helped people remember the "firsts" of life.
*5*
>SheDevil<

Sherry,my dear what an amazing write.Every mother can relate with this piece of work.5/5.Congrats for amongst the top rated poems.

This was an amazing poem, it grasped all my attention and thought, keep up the amazing writting :)

Remniscences of childhood are so sweet that one always feels nostalgic about them. You have so beautifully captured then in this poem. I am reminded of lines from Wordswoth:
THERE was a time when meadow, grove, and stream,
The earth, and every common sight,
To me did seem
Apparell'd in celestial light,
The glory and the freshness of a dream.
It is not now as it hath been of yore;—
Turn wheresoe'er I may,
By night or day,
The things which I have seen I now can see no more.

The rainbow comes and goes,
And lovely is the rose;
The moon doth with delight
Look round her when the heavens are bare;
Waters on a starry night
Are beautiful and fair;
The sunshine is a glorious birth;
But yet I know, where'er I go,
That there hath pass'd away a glory from the earth.

This is my favorite p oem of the day. Absolutely. So much truth to it. And, it's almost beautiful to see imagine the children and so on. Even the nightmare part makes me smile >_<

Great job

I let my mum read this, she said that soon as i go off this is exactly how she will feel and she said that you have got it down to a t, and not to change a word off it :)

i love the pitter patter thing i always think its such a cute pharse.
i think you could make it longer, expand it it would definitly be worth the read.
its a pretty poem, a sad one but a true one which many mothers throughout the world will share in.