Comments : Heavens Carnage

  • 16 years ago

    by RedDeadShore

    The title of this got my attention, a well thought out and planned poem, also thought proking and gloomy, the kind i like, well written, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Silver

    Awesome poem! I really loved it. It's exactly my type of poem, lol.

    Also, I really like the title.

    Thanks for commenting on my poem too!

    --Silver

  • 16 years ago

    by charlie

    I love this poem :) i really really do its defo going in my faves! :) top class 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Dawn aka Dominique

    I love it! It's extremly mystyrious! Makes you wanna keep reading!

  • 16 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Wow...that was amazing. You caught me with your first sentence, I loved how you phrased everything. And the end was.... breathtaking. I wish I could rate you higher than a 5/5, because this is very really good.

  • 16 years ago

    by Love vs Fate

    Very astonishing poem. I liked the flow to it. great work and keep it up. You're a good poet.

  • 16 years ago

    by yblehs

    I like the line "forever running from the shadow" or something like that ... that was really strong =]... i just wish you had some other poems that werent so sad =[

    Great job

    and your a good poet

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Gazing at Crystal Rivers
    Entranced by an empty sky
    Cloaked by rancid shadows
    Yet never questioned why"

    ^Great wording here, you really kept me interested in this whole poem, and you did a fabulous job! Very captivating and filled with emotions. Nice job. Keep writing! :)

  • 15 years ago

    by David Dork

    The first stanza is awaum XD
    Your a cool writter

  • 15 years ago

    by linkhorizon

    'Gazing at Crystal Rivers
    Entranced by an empty sky
    Cloaked by rancid shadows
    Yet never questioned why"

    I loved the mysterious, deep, dreary atmosphere you convey in this stanza. Overall a hauntingly beautiful write. brilliant. 5/5 :)

  • 15 years ago

    by JXD

    OMG brilliant, your wording is so amazing
    The first verse 'cloaked by rancid shadows' i mean wow so spine chilling

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    It seems you have carnage, yet have salvaged a masterpiece from dark emotions

    This poem stands out

  • 15 years ago

    by InvisiblyHeartless

    "Forever running from shadows
    Consumed by a blanket of lies
    Grey orbs remain so empty
    Still scanning the lifless skies"
    lifless=lifeless. you forgot the extra e.
    I can totally relate to this particular stanza. It is like this was written about me.

    "Smearing the tainted darkness
    Digging deeper every time
    Each word thrown onto paper
    Crying this blood soaked rhyme"
    This also relates to me very well.
    I think that is my favorite stanza, but not by much.

    I find nothing wrong with your rhymes, your word choice, or your flow. The picture sketched in my head moved along flawlessly. The emotions in this were strong. It was a good poem. I can relate, which makes it better.
    5/5

    Lexie

  • 15 years ago

    by Nix

    Quite impressing poem. Only thing that bothered me is rhyme pain-vein, because I think that it isn't original as rest of rhymes are. Anyway, you managed to create deep, vivid atmosphere through this poem. It is very interesting and it shows your talent. I honestly enjoyed. I like your topic, and the way you described your emotions is very detail and convincing. Simply remarkable job, very unique.

  • 15 years ago

    by Kimberley

    I would tell you which part i liked best but i love the entire thing. when i think i finally have it i read another part then get confused again. never ever ever ever ever stop doing what you do. your going places with these poems. 100/5 !! ~KM~

  • 15 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    This piece, for me, wasn't as good as your other piece that I've read, but let's be honest, you do demand a high standard, so I wouldn't worry too much, lol.

    Anyway, I just think that the reason this wasn't as good as you’re others, was that it lacked power. The words in this piece didn't exude strength. You're flow was perfect, as ever, and it was a good length.

    Brad

  • 14 years ago

    by Mello193

    Beautifully written! very good job