Your used equiptment

by Kaila   Apr 25, 2008


I feel like a doll lying upon a shelf,
you are my only hope to get free,
take me away to a far away place,
where it is only you and me.

I am a stuffed animal on your lap,
I'm there when you need me for comfort,
yet you play and toy with my emotions,
which twists my heart into discomfort.

I am the toy race car along your bed,
I am there for you when you need a laugh,
sometimes though you let me crash,
my emotions are torn apart and in half.

I feel as though I am your car,
free for an enjoyable getaway,
then parked where no one can see,
saved for an unexpected rainy day.

I am your silver hair brush,
loving to run through your hair,
always getting tangled in knots,
then thrown away although not fair.

I am your blankets when you're cold,
filling you with warmth and happiness,
tossed to the ground once it gets to hot,
then folded up nicely so there is no mess.

I feel like this hurt will never disappear,
I love you until the end of tomorrow,
then I remember my age and I cry,
when will I get my heart you often borrow?

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  • 15 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Which twists my heart into discomfort.
    `I think it would sound better as : "Which twists my heart with discomfort." But that's just a suggestion and my opinion -- I don't know how it sounds in your eyes.

    I am your blankets when you're cold,
    `blanket ... to me would sound better rather than have it plural. Again, just my opinion .

    The emotional pain that is expressed is so strong, so beautiful, so powerful -- it's clear, and captivating. At first, I was like, Oh jeez. This is gonna be another overrused poem that I read so often -- but you really proved me wrong. This was better than your others that I read, definitely. The metaphors, I adored. I was taken back to an old situation -- and I could feel emotions playing tug-o-war. And the way you ended it was just gorgeous. Well done.

    --..MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Well written piece, powerful from the beginning to the end. I think that you manged to create very vivid imagery in every stanza. Also, the flow of the whole piece is flawless. The repetition of some words threw me off a bit but I liked this piece despite that. When I began reading I thought it would become too cliche but you pulled it off nicely. You greatly expressed emotion that a lot of people can relate to.

  • 16 years ago

    by Dawn aka Dominique

    Hey I love the way you used the material objects metaphor as a comparisons to how you felt and them encorporated it into a poem! That was so sweet and the poem is very cute i've added it to my favorties! 5/5 No negs. :)

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