Down in the Valley

Aww each line is actually really good, its really well done i think. good work xx

I like this piece, but I'll start with critics:
First off, you should edit this poem and add apostrophes on some places. Also, you should revise it and add punctuation signs on some places to create more powerful rhythm. You maybe need more effective ending line (I don't want to offend you, this is juts my opinion), because the repetition of the word 'goodbye' within the last line disturbs the flow a bit.

Overall, this is well written piece which contains an amount of emotions expressed in a truly great way. I like your choice of words and the atmosphere that you created. A lot of people can relate to the feelings that you described here. Your descriptions and imagery through the poem are quite powerful.
I read the poem twice and tied to find favorite lines to highlight in the comment but there are too many really deep and profound lines.

Keep writing!

That was really a fantastic poem im kinda speechless it was so deep yet you got out what you needed the flow was amazing
5/5
Amazing Job!!!!

Wow...that was amazing, I liked the flow and just the whole overall feel of it all...very wonderful poem.