Electric pulse through life spin

This is a beautiful poem

The only grammar that is debatable
is in this line
"How these vibration
go through me with electric pulse"

Iit would be stated as this vibration, or these vibrations

Hmm. I'm kind of sitting on the fence of this one; I'm not entirely sure if I loved it or not. I liked the beginning, I immediately thought "Oh, this sounds interesting!" but I felt a little disappointed as I read on. It just didn't have that "oomph" that I was looking for.

"It is difficult reach
something nearly unreachable"

^^ I didn't really like this part, because... well, it's so obvious. I mean, I was like "Well, duh" when reading it. I feel you were trying to go for something really poetic, and this just didn't quite make it.

It's a good try, and the beginning is really good. I was just say the end needs some work. Nice try. :)

Hello
I am deeply thankfull to you that you have rated and made comments on my poem in the near past.
I have submitted my peom "Child Beggar Noshi",That i wrote when i was a Student of Civil Engineer,this is a real story of a Young Girl,and when i meet her,i was deeply grieved to see her condition.Kindly read my poem "Child Begger Noshi" and rate and Comment on it,to let me know,did it touched your heart or not
You won my heart by commenting on my poem....i am expecting that you do this favour again
Thanks alot
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Wow....gash...
such a nice poem,you deeply impressed me with this one,loved it (5/5)
I got one of my poem "when some one leaves for ever" on top ranking list,please read my this poem,and comment and rate it as well....corrections or criticism from your side will be apriciated.
words from your side mean alot to me.
Do rank it,Thanks
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Well done a deep,and very fast paced spiritual poem that i enjoyed reading