Another pathetic poem for me...

This poem is straight out sad but it is so great loves. keep on writing <33

Wow, this was a really hard-hitting poem... it leaves a very strong impression about your view on love...

Taking it for granted,
the love, joys, and laughters.
I was shock and blinded,
by the sorrow, pain and lovers.

this stanza really shows your pain when you were in love with someone... You were truly in love with this person, yet you were shown love's down side... the sudden change from line 2 to 3 is really strong, and it impacts the reader like a hot branding iron...

I thought it would be better,
But I felt is demise.
What I want now is a remover,
To off this unforgettable sins.

A lot of people feel this. Even I can relate to that... so many people can. We all have these moments when we really want to go back and undo something, especially in love...

I was born to love you with trust.
As I thought that this is getting so deep.
And I talk to you that this would be the last.
But then after that you can't eat and sleep.

yeah... maybe we should learn to trust with care... but then again, trust and love isn't something we can control. it just comes out and we have to learn to deal with it... i am also very deeply in love with a guy and its been 3 years. he doesn't know (or shouldn't at least) and my love for him just grows and grows until i end up with a heartbreak. then it starts all over again... its a never ending vicious circle of life.

You think you could fool me again?
I lost everything because of you.
And you didn't even thought all of the pain?!
Your such a dumb and don't have a clue.

yeah, i hate it when guys think they can come back to you with everything behind them.... like what they did to us doesn't count or something. i hate that. how can u do something so painful to us and come back like it never happened. they always want another chance... but we shouldn't give it to them. not unless they deserve it.

But one last thing i wanna know,
If you truly even care about me.
Even just a one minute show.
But you truly failed to see.

i love this stanza. it's my FAV. not only does it radiate clear and strong meaning, but its also really smooth and it flows velly velly mucho. its a tragic end, but it truly has meaning to it and its really deep.

i love your poems, so keep writing and pm me with updates!!!

~Sophie~