So this write had left me speechless for quite some time. This is a perfect piece of literature. It brought many different feelings: sadness in remembrance of those who I have lost thankfullness that I am still alive and pure curiosity of the thoughts that were stirring in your head as you poured your soul onto that page.

A great poem. full of pure emotions. really is a great piece of art(since that's what writing is). keep up the great work.

I can somehow recognize myself in this poem, I've had simular dreams. This poem touched my soul.

Ashley, you have an amazing talent! all i can say is WOW! THIS IS GREAT! 5/5

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Beautiful poem... I love they way you never ued the word "I". Don't know if you meant to or not but it added to the feel... Awesome work!

Wow!! oh my Gosh!! that was just wow!! i loved it!! and emotion like when you said, "She thinks to herself,
It was all just a dream.
As a single tear rolls down her cheek,
While sobbing, "No, please come back to me." that was just amazing!! i give it a 5/5

This is an absolutely wonderful poem!
You're writing skills are awesome!
I'm just learning as a poet, but you're already up there!
Continue writing. Your poetry is beautiful. =)

--Justina

This is a very interestin poem i likd it rely!! U have a great imagination!

AMAZING!!! great great job! that was so cute and sweet and sad all at the same time! LOVED it! id love it if youd comment bak!

It is quite interesting to find that dreams, created by our own minds, can affect us like that. This was a great write and the story was clear and it didn't waste time with useless metaphors, while you still worded it perfectly to give it a luster. good yob.

Good one, so is the dude dead? and her sleep is haunted by memories of the past, when he was alive?

anyways i like this line a lot:

"She never knew a dream,
Could cause so much pain..."

You are awesome :) Well the last line summed it up beautifully but you had me thinking about who was there. Hehe I thought it was like a scene from a horror movie but yeah that was great and it's interesting that we do wish we were with someone that we imagine them there with us when in fact they're not. Sad really but we sometimes need it

cheers josh

This hurts. I have felt this many times. The detail you put into this makes it all the more real. There is great emotion in this poem and it's beautiful. If you've felt this, know you're not the only one. 5/5

I like the story-telling element of this poem. It kinda sucks you in and makes you want to keep reading. Good work dear. 5/5

~Ravey~

Beautiful poem hun,
i loved the words and the flow was great!
keep up the amazing work.
and thank you so much for commenting on mine.
love love xo

I am seriously so amazed by this, I don't know why, it must hit me some way on a personal level also but your last lines..

As she continues to gaze around at the shadows,
Now with tears streaking her face like rain.
She never knew a dream,
Could cause so much pain...

Absolutely left me in awe, left me staring at the screen and wishing that I could write something like that with so much meaning. I truely admire this. AMAZING :D

"She thinks to herself,
It was all just a dream.
As a single tear rolls down her cheek,
While sobbing, "No, please come back to me."

that was my favorite part
so emotional
so heartbreaking
it was amazing
i dont know what else to say
great write.

Wow that was deep
im almost in tears
another moving poem!
you got talent!
5/5
btw you should think about writing songs
Lex