Once in A Lifetime...

Great poem! I really enjoyed reading it!! :)

We just met a couple days ago
But to me, it feels like a million years
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I like how you compared days to years...It helps tell the reader how you felt.

Where all the pain I've endured
And all the tears I've cried
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this helped me understand you...how strongly you felt even though it was only a couple days

Have been replaced with a smile
I can finally call my own...
A heart I can call home.
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These couple of lines were beautifully put.

Your like a dream come true
Someone you only find in a fairy tale book,
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i like how you keep on comparing your experiances with something very different yet still relative

For two...
Where dreams thought to be unreachable
And love so pure,
Its like heaven to endure...
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The last line confused me but...Im sure you know what you mean

Your like a breath of fresh air
Who knows when you got here...
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This part made me laugh...it is cute and funny.

Who cares...
You're here, right next to me
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That's how i feel sometimes
I like how i can relate to your poem

And thats all that matters,
Kinda blinding, like your all i see
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Love it blinding...that what i related the last line too.

I just met you...
But I'd walk a thousand miles
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I like how you remind your readers that you just met him.

I just met you...
But I'd cry you a thousand smiles
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I like the funky oxymoron you put in there gives it little...push in a way

I just met you...
But I'd jump in front of a bullet for you
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This part got me concerned for you...being that you just met him..
but i like how you describe all these things that you would do for him

Because a guy like you...
Comes once in a lifetime, thats true...
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I love the ending
beautifully put

With those beautiful words written in subtle rhyme I believe most would envy the object of your affection
very unique

"Your like a dream come true"
-Your should be you're.

"Its like heaven to endure..."
-It's should have an apostrophe.

"Your like a breath of fresh air"
-Your should be you're again.

"Kinda blinding, like your all i see"
-Your should be you're.
-Capitolize the I as well.

"I just met you...
But I'd walk a thousand miles
I just met you...
But I'd cry you a thousand smiles
I just met you...
But I'd jump in front of a bullet for you
Because a guy like you...
Comes once in a lifetime, thats true..."
-This was worded in a really simple, plain way, but your feelings really shined through in this stanza. The rhyming was kind of forced to me, too. But other than that.. Overall, the poem was pretty good and definatly very sweet and beautiful. You tend to confuse when you use your and you're. If you want to say you are.. then you use you're. [ex; you're beautiful.] Whereas, an example where you would use your would be like saying your car. I think you get it.. lol. It's the easiest concept ever. But I thought I'd point it out because I'm not sure if you forgot or weren't sure. Overall, pretty good. 4/5.