Deppression {sonnet}

Hmm this one is good..my first piece of advise is to use capitilization. It makes it look ten times better and it is way more appealing to the reader. I do like the emotion it gives off.

Wow i can very well relate to this poem. Another short but sweet read^^

This was alright. Personally, I would've preferred you capitalized your I's, and used other punctuation such as apostrophes and things. The title, though, "Deppression" is misspelled. It should be spelled "Depression". Honestly, I feel it could use a little work. However, I do like that it comes off as honest, and real. 4/5

-Briana

Very sad and heart-strung piece, so much emotion, which is a really good thing, keeps my interest and urges me to read further,

i have tried many times to rid the pain
but the hurt is there and wont leave me be
its comes back no matter what, theres no
gain
i need someone to come and rescue me
(my favorite lines)

good write, keep it up,
john

Hmm, this one reminds me of my first few poems when I first started writing - my style was almost like this.
But I like the way that you can express what you feel so easily and it's hard for the person not to fall within your words and feel the same.