Miss the love

No it's not about him =] Just about missing the feeling =]

Good poem birgit. Is this poem about mike? just curious. Anyway it's good to read something from you again :) keep up the good work.

"Ever known the feeling that everyone around you seems so in love
And you're the only one that is not
That's when I realise I should be happy with me,
Cause I'm the only thing I've got."

^^ First line -- The word "known" sounds.. weird to me. Maybe use "had", instead? "Ever had the feeling.."? And I think "realize" should be spelled with a 'z'.

"Love is not the world,
Far from it, I should know.
But it would be nice,
To be held in someone's arms again though."

^^ I liked this stanza a lot. However, I think taking out the word "again" would make it flow better.

"I just miss the love,
Miss a smile,
That says everything by saying nothing at all.
Miss that part that you can't stop drawing little hearts for a while."

^^ The second line -- I think you should add "and I" to the beginning. And the fourth line -- I think you should shorten it slightly. It takes away from the flow, because it is so much longer than the rest.

"And to be honest,
I miss those fights,
The fights about nothing,
The fights that make those wrongs, the rights."

^^ There is something about this stanza that I like. I'm not sure what, but I like it. Haha. :]

"You see, nothing would be as great
As some warm arms around me,
Just something to keep close,
But it's just some absentee."

^^ I LOVE this stanza. It's the best, in my opinion. The rhymes are good, and it flows good.

"I just miss the love,
Miss a smile,
That says everything by saying nothing at all.
Miss that part that you can't stop drawing little hearts for a while."

^^ Because this is a repeat, I'm going to say the same thing I said about this stanza the first time: The second line -- I think you should add "and I" to the beginning. And the fourth line -- I think you should shorten it slightly. It takes away from the flow, because it is so much longer than the rest.

Overall; it could use some work. It was good, though, and I liked the emotion it held.

4/5

-Briana

First comment woot! haha i love it. its straight to the point and from the heart. some peots can kinda go off subject but u didnt and you stayed with it and kept all your feelings in order