Paint me blue... gr8 poem nile...

keep it up..

best wishes for ur writes to come in d future..

Karan

That was so deep ...U got a perfect way in expressing ur ideas...
Good job,keep it up5/5..

Wonderful write...
As usual impressive word choice... i really appreciate your vocabulary...

"Alabaster constellation" - wonderful term... this really caught my attention..

"angelic obscurity of sacrilege." - another impressive term..

"Paint me blue-
now, you'll let me die. "

^^ beautiful write with a deep meaning...

keep writing...

There are pieces of me you'd never see:
alabaster constellations
of orchids and farewells;
Pearly clouds unfold pregnant stories
within seaweed weakness.
`` Wow. Oh my gosh, I've missed reading your poems! This was an amazing opening. I love how your first line is so easy to read and understand, but then you go into all the words with so much meaning, but you have to search for that meaning, it's not simple and clearly seen. When I see poems written with those type of words I always know it's your poem, you just have a unique way of writing that sticks out and everyone knows it's yours. Does that make sense?

Paint me blue-
now, you'll let me fall.
`` Well when I think of the word blue, I think of sorrow and despair. So, I think you're saying something like "Make me sad, then let me fall [hmm, I guess fall could be like losing everything, or reaching rock bottom, something like that.]". I like how you put it by itself too. That makes it stick out more, which makes it more likely to get stuck in my head.

Reveries... all those flowers obscene,
bloom, scurrilous... immoral;
`` This reminds me of dreaming.. like in a daze or something. Except the dream is a nightmare. >.>

honey, I do love this,
this angelic obscurity of sacrilege.
Overshadowed chambers entrapped
our carnal sentiments.
`` Ahh, I love the "honey, I do love this" part. It's almost sarcastic, I think, or maybe.. maybe it's more like trying to make them really believe that you love it.

Paint me blue-
now, you'll let me die.
`` Oh, the reptition is wonderful here, it's not overdone, AND you changed that last line. It went from falling to dying.. rather depressing, but beautiful in that sad way. I love how someone can make something so sad be so beautiful, and you've done just that with this whole piece.

Lovely job as always! x]

Keep writing!
Cayce

I hope I did not paint you, blue. Nice poem, I like it, 5/5. Thanks for the comment you left in my poem :)

Beatiful work...I think what makes this poem flow and appeal to people so much is the rich choice of words. The repitition of the title paint me blue also has a positive impact.
Good stuff, keep it coming!
Take care,
Ignoris

Honey, I do love this,
this angelic obscurity of sacrilege.

I don't know what it is but I love these 2 lines, they just pop out for me and stick in my head. Once again you have a great way with words, very inspiring. Great job.

This poem is absolutely stunning! Your word choice was wonderful. I loved the emotion in the piece.

"Reveries... all those flowers obscene,
bloom, scurrilous... immoral;
honey, I do love this,"

^^ This particular portion of the piece really hit me. I don't know why, though. It just did.

Altogether, this piece made me feel many different things, but that is why I enjoyed it as much as I did. It held my attention form the beginning to the end. You did a wonderful job on this.

Five out of five.

``Briana

"There are pieces of me you'd never see:
alabaster constellations
of orchids and farewells;
Pearly clouds unfold pregnant stories
within seaweed weakness."

Wonderful opening, and you kept my attention the whole way through, beauitful wording that took my breath away!

"Reveries... all those flowers obscene,
bloom, scurrilous... immoral;
honey, I do love this,
this angelic obscurity of sacrilege.
Overshadowed chambers entrapped
our carnal sentiments."

I love the descriptions here, and the way it is filled with so much feeling. Well expressed. Keep writing, always and forever.....