Aww poor girl :[

nice flow, nice job

5/5

Good free verse with some internal rhyme, thats good. Her heart sank like the titanic, that needs a little help. I'm not sure what you need to do but it looses flow right there. hope that helps you.

Its really lovely and so simple...
i like it.. :) keep it up

Its really lovely and so simple...
i like it.. :) keep it up

"Her heart sank like the titanic" is my favorite line. Your poetry has brilliant imagery

After 55 other comments, I really have nothing else to add, except for... it's really really good, simply, and very enjoyable, 5/5

Great poem you write very well!

Nicely Written, Great Job!!!

I dont really know what to say about this. Its sad, and flowed really well, and ur wording of this write, its deep, and it seemed to draw me in, to keep reading ya no? Nice work. 5/5

Ah :( it makes me want to give her a hug. i hope that "she" was not you.

She was in pain
Because the man never came

very good! love it!

xx.

A deeply sad poem, well expressed:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid