Wow that was amazing. Thats a new favorite poem of mine. I actually had a petty bad break up yesterday and really am not coping with it. I have been really battling to cope with what happened yesterday and so have done some pretty stupid things like cutting myself and getting overly drunk last night to try and forget what happened because it has really affected me a lot. This poem however was so motivational, I am so glad that I read it as I have been extremely depressed resulting in me having a lot of suicidal thoughts. This poem has really helped me a lot and I am sure that there are many other girls out there who can agree with me and also relate to this amazing piece!! I have tears in my eyes whilst I'm writing this comment but I am so proud of you for putting up such an amazing piece!!

This poem is so cute!
The word choice made it sound very cute and funny.
I liked the rhymes you picked up, which helped the flow alot. The word choice is excellent for this piece and the structure is well orginized.

For the cute poem 5/5

Nice one there...
ya cheaters always have this smile on their face, but its a big fake smile, because all cheaters that hurts girls are the ones hurting...

its a very good poem!
the flow was good, and nice use of words...
keep up the good work

Wow. That was simple yet awesome.

It put a smile on my face for sure. It's a great message in a little poem. I loved the rhythm and the rhyming! I love the "we women stick together." it sounds powerful when said like that. It gives the poem a little umph...Great job!

-mo-

Wow!!! great poem i love it!!!!!!!! 5/5

I like it, It gives me confidence against the world and it flows really nicely, kind of reminded me of a little girl yelling 'cheater cheater pumpkin eater' or however it goes on the playground.....i love it though 5/5

"Cheater, Cheater
There you are
Although you are loved
You are no star"

-- I'm not a huge fan of this stanza. Honestly, it doesn't flow very well when I read it.

"Girls see through you're looks
Hurting us, you can't live without
You make girls want to scream
You make girls want to shout"

-- In the first line, "you're" should be "your". The way you have it now, it says.. "..you are looks".

"You're nothing but a cheater
You attempt to hurt us inside
You hope to take our confidence
Your goal is to steal our pride"

-- I liked the rhyming in this stanza, I thought it was very good. I do think that you should limit the number of times you use the word "you".

"One thing you haven't done
Is succeed with your scheme
We girls are stronger than that
We have solid self esteem"

-- In this third line, I think you should change "we" to "us". And in the fourth line, I think "self-esteem" has a hyphen between the words. Maybe not, but everytime I've seen it, it has had one.

*Overall, I really liked the poem. I liked what the poem was about as a whole. The flow really improved after the first stanza, and I liked the rhyming. Good job.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

That was a lovely poem and i'm sure your friend must have been super pleased with your poem.Good on you girl well written

Grant

The message was clear but it could have been done a little stronger...Its coz im no fan of cheaters...XDD Although i liked how it was written, in a cute way....You used very subtle words in regards to the word cheater that made it a lil soft or somehow funny...But if that was your intention then you did a fantastic job here..xDD

Awe. . . that was really sweet and rhyming! but it could use a bit of work. over all it was quite good. . .!

I thought the concept was nice. I liked how it looked as if guy defeated the girls from the start, but at the end it came out with the girls high and mighty on top.

Your rhyming was alright, but your word choice was a little ordinary. Next time writing try to use words you've never used before. It'll help your poem sound better as well as help the reader be more interested in what they're reading.

My honest critique: 4/5

P.S. - You're absolutely right; you're friend doesn't need a guy to prove that she's special and loved.

Its wonderful way of expressing yr feelings. Keep it up..

Tats such a good poem.. poems like these you can just read all day.. keep it up!!

This was a very cute poem. Coming from someone who has been cheated on, it is difficult to cope with. But having friends like you and having others to relate makes it feel less lonely. This poem was very strong and it gets across the point. It attacks and it destroys. Wonderful and powerful.
<3Raych

Ha, you were right, I really did enjoy this one. It was so full of truth and voice; two things that make a poem amazing. Also:

Cheater, Cheater
There you are
Although you are loved
You are no star
^^I loved how you started off with the repetition of the word 'Cheater'. It caught my attention and it made me try to put a voice with the words lol. I'm not sure if that made sense, but just know that it is a good thing.

"We know why you smile
We know why you grin
You don't fool us girls
You're a cheater within"
^^Nice. It is sort of a battle between women and the cheating men eh. And it's so true that a woman ALWAYS knows =]

"We know who you are
Your guys worship you
They look to you for advice
So they can copy what you do"
^^in the second line, I think that 'The' should take the place of 'Your'. It's just a suggestion though.

"Girls see through your looks
Hurting us, you can't live without
You make girls want to scream
You make girls want to shout"
^^My favorite stanza. To me, it seems as if this is the stanza where you are taking a stand and actually stating how cheating men makes you feel. Sort of the climaxx so to speak.

"You're nothing but a cheater
You attempt to hurt us inside
You hope to take our confidence
Your goal is to steal our pride"
^^suggestion: you should place commas after 'cheater' and 'confidence', and add periods.

"One thing you haven't done
Is succeed with your scheme
We girls are stronger than that
We have solid self-esteem"
^^perfect!

"Cheater, Cheater
Your game ends here
Us women stick together
We no longer have any fear"
^^great ending! way to stand up and put a end to the Cheater's game. Loved it!

Overall, well written peice. The strong female voice was heard throughout the entire poem. Perfectly and beautifully written all in its own.
5/5

Kay Jay