I know you all hate one liners but there is only one thing i can say without doing this piece of art an injustice.

Beautiful.

5/5

Really once again a great job...love all the emotion you put into this.

5/5

Dang you are good...wish i could write like that

"Death still breaths my name
And like a selfish lover
He always wants his way"

This part is worded perfectly and I like how you make the reader feel so many things while reading this poem.

"Well I suppose
I'll keep my promise
So forever still stands
And speaking of love
Forevers still the plan"

Good ending, overall, this was a very emotional and heartfelt poem that came straight from you heart. Nice job, take care. Keep writing, always and forever...

I am not experienced enough to play the blame game but I did enjoy the innocence of your poem. treasure your youth as long as you can and be cautious in your commitments
by the way did say I enjoyed your poem
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

A very beautiful job, i absolutly agree with every other comment above =]
This poem flowed very well and you choice of wording was great, Wicked jo XD

I wont take back my promises, I will always love you and I dont want this to be the "end" unless it fades unto that. I love you still, always will as I said I would.. the arguement was a dumb sense of self pride of my part that shouldnt ever have come out to you.

Anyway.. till forever finally meets its end maybe one day it will return and we can learn to forgive each other.

I love you Zoe, dont let me fool you otherwise

I suppose its not fair
To ask you to keep
All your silly little promises
You whispered to me

Great write but I especially like these lines ^ ^

Wow, this truly was a work of art. I'd rather not critique this one because its beautiful. The emotion put into this is just so amazing.. there are no words. It's so sad in its own way because we've all been there, and we all know what it feels like.. the disappointment, and all of the other emotions that are flowing through us. This piece showed it all. Simply amazing, gorgeously written
5/5 for sure

This poem had a lot of emotion coming from it. Yes. love does hurt. but what would life be with out heartbreak? i think its a win win situation. if your with your love your happy. if youve split up youve gained wisdom. i like how you said
"I suppose its not fair
To ask you to keep
All your silly little promises
You whispered to me"
this really touched me because i can relate.
nice job 5/5

Now this is pure perfection! The emotion throughout the entire piece is what really stood out to me. A lot of writers fail to just write exactly what/how they feel, and you did an amazing job with that. I believe that this would be a great choice for your school mag. Loved everything about it. Beautifully written. 5/5