Woahh!
very nice!
the ending blew me away!
very very great job! 5/5 deff!

"And now I struggle in just saying your name."
`Maybe change in to with..?
Sounds better to be that way.

"And the air feels a little colder with you not here."
`Dont start lines with and.. usually if you take it out it sounds just as good, if not better.. at least I think so. Just a suggestion.

Overall, very sad write. But I could definatly feel your emotions and feelings. Well done, thoughtout poem. 5/5.

Very well written poem I must say the end surprized me

well done

"It's so easy to say that I don't miss you,
But of course my heart won't say the same.
Cause you used to be the hero in the storm,
And now I struggle with just saying your name."

This really is heartbreaking, you really made the reader feel your suffering and pain..

"I remember all the stupid jokes and inside laughs,
In the end, they really make no sense at all-
Yet, it was something that only we understood.
"I never realized that you'd be the one to fall."

This shows what a relationship you had with him, and all of the good times that you spent together. Well expressed, nice job.

"I haven't heard your voice in a little while,
And the air feels a little colder with you not here.
Life just gets a little harder, a little lonelier -
When there's no one here to calm these fears."

Aww....you wrote this flawlessly, and it shows when you are so attached to someone, and then they aren't there, it really hurts and causes you pain.

"I'll never doubt that you'll always care for me,
Cause I grew up for years as your best friend.
But daddy, you're ripping your whole life apart,
And I know that I can't save you in the end."

Very sad ending, wasn't expecting it to tell the truth. Nice work, so much emotion and feeling poured out of this poem, and I can definitely tell this came straight from your heart. I really enjoyed reading this, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...

I liked the flow of this poem.
the theme was nice and unpredictable toward the ending.

good job.

-naiive girl

This poem is touching. You're trying to stop the person who stands as the manly figure in your life - your father.
About the technical details: The structure is solid and constant, The rhyming schemes don't seem forced, which is good, and the flow is strong.

Nice poem 5/5

Wow steph. that poem was really sad. i cld relate to few of the lines, diff situation for me but.
i liked this verse, hit home for me;

"I haven't heard your voice in a little while,
And the air feels a little colder with you not here.
Life just gets a little harder, a little lonelier -
When there's no one here to calm these fears"

good job. 5/5 hope u been good. xo

The end made me cry...even toguh I hardly cry...all I wanna say is that this is a great poem with really sad and touching ending.
5/5

I like this poem alot. Good write