Step To The Side

Well done. once again the flow of the poem was brilliant. i really enjoy reading your poetry but sadly i have not been on recently. so im sorry that i have not been to read your poetry.

im look forward to reading of your work

5/5

"Now like I said
So many times before"
- The flow's off here.

[Now like I've told you
so many times before]

- Makes it better. (:

BUT, my actual suggestion is removing

"Now like I said
So many times before
Forevers never there
And after break-up #1
Forevers just not fair"

Completely. The entire poem flows flawless, up until that stanza, then after that stanza it flows flawlessly again.

It's a good poem with one bad stanza.

"And with a hello kiss"
You might want to make it:
"And with a "hello" kiss"

"Forevers never there"
should be:
"Forever is never there"

This was really really good. It was kind of dark it its own way. Especially the ending, but this was just amazing. The emotion in this was breathtaking, and I loved the way you portrayed this, just amazing job.
5/5 definitely.

The flow on this was spot on. absolutely awesome, so breathtakingly beautiful, written with heart and emotion.
mwah