A million pieces (club contest)

Wow, I love this poem
I read it in the contest thread and I was all like wow
I'm in awe..this poem is so touchy and a very great read !!

I drank the poison from your cup
But not before I tied you up
A buzzing saw above your head
Is hanging by a piece of thread

This stanza was my fave, I totally love it, especially the first line, very well written ^.^

These wicked games you love to play
Just a little hurting everyday
My broken heart scattered on the ground
A million pieces to be found

this one is also outstanding, I love the darkness of this poem, lovely wording, deeply deserved to win =]]

I think I'm gonna save this poem
very well done
write on
xxx

Although you posted this poem on the dark section, I'd say the first two stanzas is infact, rather poignant. Utterly sad.........talk about tears."Those forgotten tears"......this line says so much more. Loved it!

OPPS !!

As the poison takes my life
My hand relaxed, you won't survive
The final sight my eyes did see
A million pieces in front of me

wow ! I believe that the one we love give us pain but when they take our life , they have no one like us to give pain and they survive no more. I agree !
Love this poem
Well written!
5/5
Peace and cheers !
Biya

This is a very good poem. I like it. It takes alot for me to like stuff but hey you did it. ha ha. keep up the good work

Mazie

This was different from your other poems I have read. Very deep and dark.