Betrayed

Firstly I am sorry... To be honest, I underestimated you not in the sense of poetry writing but in the sense of writing about intangible stuffs. I thought its not everyone's cup of tea to write about guilt so easily. But you made it look much easier. A great poem seriously. Hats off to you.

Mmm i can feel the pain and feelings getin out from this piece , you seem soo epical in pain in it ,

but i tell yous omthing
yeah it is my quote acutaly that say : you never really lived , untill you find somone to die for !!

it is true , in every way ,

and i tell you love forgive everything , and no limit to the time he can forgive , the improtant is that the will of regreting the fauilt and fixing the fault is there and all can be ok ,
if that dont happen well tha tis not true love

we all do mistake that s why we are humans , and not GODS , if we dont accept the other as like this , too , we can never goo real , !!!

this one a find representation of your poem ,
but you do it free style witch is not my favorite style , i like rhyming and such and stanza sturcture ,

sooo keep it up !!!
i will folow your poems as long they are not a meter long !!!
^__^

If you could take a walk inside
You'll see how much you dwell in me

I really loved these lines. It was just a perfect metaphor. Brilliant.

You there and me here, yet you're everywhere in my being

That's also very good. Despite the distance, he is everywhere inside of you. Very powerful.

That's an interesting take on the betrayal contest. It sounds as if you were the one that betrayed. Perhaps I'm reading it wrong, but from all the remorse and regret coming from you, that's the message I left with.

That was pretty good.

Remarkably well written! I love this one and the emotions in it, i could feel.

Job well done!

Well, this will be sure to make him melt!
A very powerfull plea for forgiveness, Kel!

Hugs!

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