Away

by Nula   Nov 1, 2008


I feel like you're the reason why I'm thinking,
I don't want to loose you by my thinking,
It seems like this feeling is the prerogative of my mystery.

Feelings for you are getting stronger,
No need to break this over,
Cuz you're the one that I fall in love like in this dream of my emotion that I've always wanted.

I've wanted to hold you,
But forgiveness won't take the pain away.

I was numb when you get away,
I still got you in my mind,
Memories won't disappear
I keep them inside my heart
Cuz you're the one that has my heart!

Ps. I've just changed a bit the poem "Changes" how u like it now??

comments please!!!

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  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    I feel this one needs to be revised to make it little tidy. I appreciate your write but it could have been much more better and gripping.

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This is a very good write =]
    nice job ^^

  • 15 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Cuz you're the one that I fall in love like in this dream of my emotion that I've always wanted.

    ^This doesn't make sense to me there is a word missing in there I would rearrange it

    I keep them inside my heart
    Cuz you're my destiny that have my heart!

    ^Repeat of the word heat throws me off here, you could keep the first line as

    "I keep them inside

    A good effort, hope I was helpful, keep on writing :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    It's always been very nice expressed.. I like it 5/5
    regards,
    Shokry

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