The Dance

I really enjoyed this poem. I think that it needs punctuation. I know certain poems don't really need it, but sometimes it just helps with the flow and such. Other than that, I think you've done a good job of wording it and showing the emotions. I really liked the meaning of it and how you compared it to a dance. I did change a few in the third and fourth stanzas because I thought it sounded better there. The flow was okay, but it just read better.

I think the punctuation would work like this:

Let's dance
through the hard times,
full of uncertainty.

Trying your best
to stay in step -
don't lose track
of where you are.

Don't give up
when the steps are hard.
Slow down some
and you shall learn.

You might step on a
few toes along the way.
Apologize and move on,
never linger too long.

You might mess up
a time or two.
But that's okay,
you'll get past it.

life is a dance
that everyone has joined.
Made up of choices,
you'll have to make.

This was a really good poem. I get the meaning of it. But, I've gotta say that the flow is a bit scratchy. It was still a great poem. Good job.

.;CiiNDY:.

I love the random rhymes throughout the poem. I especially love these lines.

"Don't lose track
Of where you are.

Don't give up
When the steps are hard."

"Just apologize and move on.
Never linger too long."

Great work! 5/5

Nice job in the comparison of a dance to life. Very well written and a good read.

"Don't loss track"
`Lose

"Never linger to long."
`Too

Wow the last stanza pretty much said it all in just a few words.. really it did. I loved how you took life and dance and made it a huge metaphor.. this poem was simple but it definatly does speak the truth.. I loved it, it was a unique write and I enjoyed it very much. :]

5/5.