Dreaming is the only place

by Prince LJ   Dec 2, 2008


Your smile your face
the scent of your skin
all you do is hurt me
cutting me open from within

a pain so deep
a branded scar
harbored in my heart
so that i can never forget

my bed is cold and lonely
the place you used to lie before
no more company in the dark
goodbye to our synched heartbeats

your ghost is never far away
everyplace, every sound a memory with you
our glory days are over
but the battle has just begun

a life so bright and full of happiness
is now void of feeling and emotion
a walking corpse is what remains
trying to find reason or direction

another day has come and gone
i lay my head on your pillow once more
ill close my eyes and start to smile
letting memories once again flood over me

the morning will come to soon
like it always does
and ill return to my hollow existence
but not before i dream of that which is no more

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  • 11 years ago

    by H E Losey

    A nice story well formatted. I would add punctuation. Remember that rhythm/metre is what changes a group of words from prose to poetry. Poetry does not need rhyme but it demands rhythm/metre and I think this is a bit lacking here.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Sab and touching ...

    "another day has come and gone
    i lay my head on your pillow once more
    ill close my eyes and start to smile
    letting memories once again flood over me"

    ^^ I found this so touching ... this could have been a beautiful ending :) but the one you wrote suits it best :)

    one suggestion.. make all the i's capital :)

    keep writing..

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem the wording was great. The flow was good. I gave ita 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    Very well thought out poem.
    it painted a mysterious picture in my mind.
    keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Aww.. sad. bery sad. the image sleep on the bed without the one u love. remembering her right there byurside. and with one blink she's gone. but the memories are stil there floating in ur mind never lettign them go. they bring smiles, laugh n tears. a lovely poem you wrote here truly. i love it. keep it up!! 5/5

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy