Wow I havnt read a poem with this type of content from both perspectivs before, it was really different and I thought it was written really well =] your rhyming fitted in with the flow nicely and you had me captivated so again excellent job it's a very strong and powerful write.

This is so sad, I know how it feels though. Nobody should have to go through such a horrible thing.

As I was reading it, I was starting to cry, and was very emotional. You're a good writer, so keep it up.

I really liked this line, and I don't know why. It just seems so poetic..

"My tears mix with the rain and the cement is cold"

Thank you for sharing your feelings. And like I said very well done. 5/5
-Ally

This poem is incredibly well written. The way that each stanza is the other persons POV makes it very easy to read and it flows well.

'He won't leave he won't get off I already know'

^ This line doesn't seem to go as well as the others fit in. Perhaps changing the second 'he wont' into an or, so that it reads 'he wont leave or get off i already know' would fit better.

All in all, a very good poem.

This is soooo good<333
5/5
ive been through that so
i know how you feel
if you need anything
im here <333
keep writing.
i love it [=

Its never tha girls fault you sould be able to have fun when you want to and they sould never put hands on any one

Amber

Ouch that was scary, but very explicit. You expressed your thought creatively and effectively. It was sad and had a lot to say. 5/5

Overall, it was a fairly good. The suspense doesn't build, but stays the same through all the stanzas.

I can see where you were beginning to force the flow out, and I bet you can feel it too.
4/5

Very well worded poem, so sincere and full of double meanings. i love how you did the duo thing. great writting, the pain is real and it had me on the end of my seat reading it, will also admit i had a few tears welling up.

IBE
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Thanks<3

Wow!

How does someone actually leave a comment on a poem like this.

I feel a little awkward, but I really REALLY enjoyed this poem from a poetic view point. I feel bad for the situation but the poem was awesome.

First, I liked the choice of the rhyme style. Any other style (like the normal ABCB) wouldn't have made as much of an impact. Reading the first two stanzas were a little odd due to the different view points. It took me a few seconds to realize the difference, but after I did I really enjoyed the differences. I love that you expressed two separate points of view at the same time. Bravo. Too bad you could not add color to the second, forth, sixth, eighth and tenth stanzas; that would help the dialogue a little.

Not that I have been through anything like this, but I could imagine someone in this situation would keep asking themselves rhetorical questions like you have written. Only a great poet could add this type of character to a poem like this.

The only part I did not care for too much was in the third line of the third stanza. "My tears mix with the rain and the cement is cold". While I think the line is great, it really didn't fit with the rest of the poem. I didn't see anywhere else in the poem where the scene or the background was discussed, so this was a little off the beaten path. I love the imagery in the line, but I didn't think it fit well with the rest of the poem.

On the other hand, I really loved the line "My body is numbing, my blood is freezing". Normally people would state their blood is burning or on fire, but I love the contrast you used. I also enjoyed the "He is my first, but I hope not my last" line and how it contrasted with "She wasn't my first, nor is she my last". It really showed that she had a good understanding that this will impact her future.

Overall, the poem was OUTSTANDING. The flow was good, and I love how you managed to use pretty simple and common words to express the situation. The questions really added meaning to the characters thought pattern.

Awesome poem.
i loved how you wrote it based on the victim's and the rapist's point of view.
it was great..i loved it..keep up the good work. :)

Thanks!

Omg this was deep you put a lot of feeling into it good job

Amber

Wow...
The way that use the victims mind set along with that of the rapest.. was brilliant.

I'm reallly speechless.
I love the way that you wrote it
And i love the way that its so raw, and so real.
I've personallly heard this line before:
"Let me make her love men and not be a dike"

Your an amzing writter.
5/5

Oh... wow i have never read a poem like this. it made me completly speechless. shit!! i just woo.. it was comptely amazing how u writen it.
it just hurts this happen. n we can't do anything bout it to change it. woow. it sucks eggs this happen.

5/5

AlWaYs TaKE CARe,
Frenchy

Though the theme is tragic the poem is well written and needs to be well read not only to show no means no to the attacker but also for the healing of the victim There is no way she is scum
well done

This is a wonderful poem...very sad but very well written!

Tnx<3

OMG! This is one of the best poems that I have read. But even here, at times, i feel that you may be forcing the rhymes.

Don't sympathize or blame blaspheme to any woman whose endured(yourself if inclusive), a reinforcement of cycles of pain, sorry, I can't see giving a voice to anyone so intent on stealing a voice.