Perfectly in Love

by Darien   Feb 13, 2009


Perfectly in Love

Our secret summer of romance and bliss,
All began with a passionate first kiss.
Warmth we felt as we kept each other close,
Times we spent alone is what I missed most.

Falling asleep in the comfort of your arms,
The way you giggled at my boyish charms.
Love sparked when we kissed in the rain,
It locked a memory that will always remain.

A weekend at your place meant the world,
I started to think of you as my girl.
The battle you fought you finally won,
You asked me out and our life begun.

We stayed together when the summer had end,
Miles apart you were still my girlfriend.
To see each other we took long trips,
It was worth the travel to kiss your lips.

Now we stand together perfectly in love,
As peaceful as a pair of turtle doves.
Though I write to you from far away,
I still wish you a Happy Valentine's Day.

** To my girlfriend Emily **

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  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    A very sweet and tender Valentine's poem, Darien.
    Now I know why you told me you have butterflies, he he.
    I am happy for you, my friend...love is beautiful:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    I loved the title! It captured my attention with its simple beauty.

    "Our secret summer of romance and bliss,"
    ^I loved the alliteration here with "secret" and "summer" It sounded so beautiful when I read it out loud...like a song. Well said.

    "Warmth we felt as we kept each other close"
    ^I think it would sound better as "warmth was felt..." It gets away from the repitition of "we"

    "We stayed together when the summer had end,"
    ^This was a bit awkward in flow for me ending it with "end" But then I guess you did that so it can rhyme with the next line with "girlfriend"

    I LOVED the ending. It was so beautiful. Sometimes love makes the distance bearable and the hope to see each other soon keeps the love going. The emotions expressed throughout this whole piece was beautiful and I could tell it came straight from your heart.

    Great use of imagery to set the scene in my mind and had me smiling all throughout the piece. It was very honest and genuine filled with the beauty behind love that sometimes gets forgotten. I'm sure your girlfriend really enjoyed this Valentines Day poem.

    Well done!
    I am glad I read it.
    *5/5* "]

  • 15 years ago

    by austin schuchard

    This is like the best poem i have read, it explains not only your relationship but many others and it just give a good general point about love

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Well i like how you how you wrote this valentine's day poem for your girlfriend. The imaginary was great. You have manged to inject emotions into the poem with just simple words to show ur affections.Though distant relationships is hard, but it just makes ur love stronger for each other as the both of you have to resist the temptation and always stay tue to each other. The flow was amazing. It was certainly a delightful to read. i'm sure ur girlfriend loves and appreciate this poem that u have beautifully crafted especially for her.

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Birgit

    I'm having an "awwwww-moment" =] This is so beautiful ^^
    Reading it made me smile =]

    It read easily too, because it had a nice flow to it =]
    Wish you two the best (:

    xx
    5/5

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