I agree with Miss Take, the first verses drew me in and then the storm came. As I read the first verses, I could actually imagine the insects and butterflies meeting to have a "party" and the things they would do. Good job. 5/5

This is so beautiful with intense and descriptive imagery. The ending was so so saddening...A great write from you, and well out of your comfort zone too. Well done!!

"In the middle of the forest all insects had gathered
From their place upon the leaves they watched the show
Two beautiful butterflies with wings of green, blue and gold
In the circle of light making summersaults, high and low"

This stanza extremely drew my heart and soul into this piece with the imagination, creativity, imagery, and all those other things you have provided. I can picture this in my head, what a scene! Good flow and rhyming too.

"How enchanting this dazzling dance of love and passion was
Spectators gazing with mouths ajar in silent amazement
As the rays of the sun reflected upon their golden wings
So in love were they, hearts filled with blissful contentment"

Wonderful feelings and emotions here, nature is such an antonishing thing and you have described it greatly here.

"Bees hummed and flies were buzzing; Gods choir joining in
Leaves rustled and the sweet scent of summer filled the air
The night moths in their dull cloth of brown envied them
As they fluttered and twirled in their colorful hues so fair"

I love how you don't just write about one thing, but you incorporate every single thing going on, from the bees to the leaves, to the night moths. I greatly enjoyed that stanza, for you have taken me to another world, a world so breathtaking its just overwhelming!

"Then, in the blink of an eye a sudden violent storm came
Blew all insects from their place and panic entered the scene
Holding on to the branches and hiding wherever they could
They waited this storm out, the likes of which they had never seen"

Wow, I wasn't expecting this, how sad that a storm had to come on then. I am drawn into every word of what you write, for your work is never boring or non-captivating.

"At last all went quiet and they gathered in the open space
Counting heads until they knew for certain one was missing
It was the little butterfly with his blue and golden wings
His lady broke down in tears unable to stop weeping"

Awww....this is so heartbreaking.
Second line: I love how you say "counting heads" because it reminds me of a group of schoolchildren, a very creative thing to put in. Poor butterfly, you really create a sense of strong weeping and sadness here.

"With her little head sunk to her chest she flew up high into the air,
where the scorching rays of the sun ended the life of this lady fair"

A sad ending, but you certainly wrote it well. I have to say this is by far my favorite from you! I am a true lover of nature poems and have found yours so breathtaking! I feel as if no other person could explain the beauty and sadness of what you wrote. Well done, this was a excellent piece to read. Take care and have a great weekend! 5/5 from me.

~MaryAnne

Ingrid! How could you make it end so sadly? That was so sad.. anyways,
it was a fantastic write, i think definitely a favourite of yours, for me.
The start really made me feel content, it lured me in and i loved the poem. it was a delight to read. Then came the storm.. and from then on it was incredibly sad! But really well thought out and i really enjoyed it.

Bees hummed and flies were buzzing; Gods choir joining in
^^ i just really love that! I thought it was clever and really well worded. Gods choir.. how unique! Really well done.

A fabulous write from you.
5/5

This was definatly different from anything youve written before. I noticed that it was different in several ways. I don't normally see you writing nature poems at all, so it was nice to see you stepping out of your comfort zone and writing a nature poem for once and not another love poem. Secondly, it was a rather lengthly poem.. normally your poems are short and to the point but you took a longer time on this one and you could definatly see that as you read. I think this is one of your best ones that Ive seen in a long time.. it shows that you put a lot of time into it, and it wasnt just a 10-15 minute poem that portrayed a short thought that Ive heard in many poems before. This was different in several ways, like I said. Impressive write, I loved it.. a story almost. I found it so beautiful in the beginning and midway through, it became really sad and the end just ended on a sad note.. but anyways, the poem was great.. the transition from happy to sad in this poem was smooth..

You can tell I enjoyed this, I've been rambling so much.

5/5.

What a sad ending! The piece is full of vivid, picture painting imagery. Good word choice. I do love the nature poems as I am anxiously awaiting spring! Nicely done.

Beautifully Penned, Exquisite in Evwry Word, A Most Charming Read.

Ingrid, you have an awesome ability to take any subjesct and turning it into something beautiful and charming.
This one is no exception.It was superbly penned and a definite joy to read.Loved it my friend.Keep up the great work.
Paul...

I love nature poems like this. Giving an unusual life to something you'd never imagine would be doing those things.
The pictures you paint are... brilliant and just... dazzling.
And I love rhyming poems.
I also enjoy the happiness turned to chaos turned to sadness then death. It's an interesting turn of events and just... delightful.

How sad, but a truly delightful poem Ingrid.
I loved this story that you penned, kept me reading onwards right up to the end.
A portrayal of love, damned at the end by the storm.
A well written piece.