Broken

Omg. That was excellent. I could vividly picture this all inside my head and I could feel the emotions slam into me. 5/5 Deffinately.

-Ally

Beautifully written and full of sorrow and depth.....lovely rhyme and perfect flow as always! Interesting structure of the verses...works well.

Take care, Debbie

Jenn,

Loved the rhythmn of this write. I hope I understand it right. The soul was taken and the mind was left to question why.

"Weeping angel
Do not cry
Some day I'll return"

I think the flow would be a bit better if the last line of this stanza read: Some day I will return.

Such a deep read. Wonderfully executed. Lovely and sad.

Always,
Jeannie

Jenn, this is really hauntingly sad but yet beautiful. An excellent write.

Jenn
What a touching piece you've penned here. The words rolled off my tongue and I thought to myself " this would make an amazing song"
It just flowed so smoothly ... and touches so deeply.

The worth that's buried
Deep inside
Your weakened, anguished mind.
^^^
Loved the ending ... makes one really sit back and think.

Great read ...
Luanne