Strings

I liked the theme of this poem of how we are forced to act to what others want of us. the real sad thing is that it isnt just goverments and institutes that controll who we pretend to be. but also perants, friends and even those who love us. and i will promise you this the more strings you break the more you realise how many more are still tying you to your masks.
and back to the poem i will say the first and last stanza where good but in the second one you should either try to make the sentences shorter or break it up into more lines to get it to flow better. and remember just because nearly everyone else writes poems of four lines per stanza doesnt mean you have to. i much preffered the format and free rhyme scheme of your poem "i love you" to this one. i just find the format and rhyme of these type of poems too generic.
ps you should maybe have a look at my poem "to serve the servants" it has a similiar theme and i think you might enoy it

Wow! that was good. i love the whole dance theme because i am a dance major at my school. good job. :D

Beautiful! I thought this a superb poem, loved the puppet metaphor, really helped it say what you were trying to say. The ballet dancers really helped with imagery and the grace of the dancers were reflected in your words. I thought it a very elegant poem, so insightful about life and growing up.

Now, my writing can be taken in ANY mannar you wish, but if you don't understand it, this is what it's supposed to be about, in my view anyways.

The world is being fed so many false-truths via internet, magazines, television, government, so many things people just do but don't question. So many people don't question why things are being done how they are and don't bother to change, I'm saying here that in my life my 'strings' broke that tied me to following the same patterns as the world, doing as your government says or things like that, like a puppet. I'm saying here i won't be a puppet, that I'm going to be different and that i hope to encourage others to follow my lead and 'break their strings' (:

Nice job 5/5