Yeah-this is great-although it seems to end rather abrupt-i sent you a msg with some suggestions-feel free to ignore them-haha.

but a 5/5
xx

I thought that you loved me
I thought that you cared,
I thought that i could trust you,
With the secrets that we shared.

^^1st lines i would have to say were my favourite, they were perfect opening lines!! very good flow also.

I gave you everything i had,
I gave you my delicate heart,
I trusted you not to break it,
But you went and tore it apart.

^^these lines were great aswel, they showed alot of thought & dedication to your poetry.

You made me so happy,
The best id felt in a long time,
But it all changed so fast,
You simply crossed the line.

^^This flow was good but,
*The best id felt in a long time.* I dont no why, it just didnt work for me, but it still sits great.

I gave you my heart,
And you broke it bit by bit.
You grinded it into the dirt,
And simply spat on it.

^^*You grinded it into the dirt,
And simply spat on it..*
This my darl was a llittle more off then then the others, it sort of didnt flow or connect greatly with the rest of the poem.

Other then that id have to say 3-4 out of 5.
Well done, Keep it up!
*Hunny*

I gave you my heart,
And you broke it bit by bit.
You grinded it into the dirt,
And simply spat on it.

fav fav part flows really well 5/5

He he-thanks for the acknowledgement!!!

This was really good poem. The flow was good and the rhyme to. The emotion is in it to. This was really a good poem and good job to you Aish since you helped.

I realized that our rhyme schemes are very similar in our poems. I'm glad we have similar styles, it's hard for me to find poets like me. Yet again, I love this one. It flows well, and tells a great story. Keep it up, and thanks for the comments. :)

Aww, this was a really great poem, it was quite sad, but i could feel the emotion you were trying to portray of a broken heart.I realy loved the rhyming and the flow of the poem was great.
Great job
5/5

A really good poem---the flow of your word are great and the rhyming was excellent

5/5

NICELY DONE>>> 4/5

Aww this was so cute. (=

Very well written .. You're very talented for so young . Thank you for your time as well :) , take care . 5/5