I agree with the other two. It really touched my heart. I loved how you put the seasons in your poem which to me showed even stronger emotion. The last line really blew me away. Officially one of my favorites now~
Well first off I'm glad that you asked me to read this becausue it is really a wonderful poem. The imagery in this poem was wonderful and breathe taking. The flow of the poem was also good as well as your poems rhyme. The cpontext of the poem was awesome and can be true in an way. The poem also had really, really good emotion and you clearly made it clear with yuor word choice and also the way you expressed yourself was good.
All in alll you did a really good poem and I don't think you need to chage this poem because you made it the best it could have been. So once again good job. 5/5
This poem is really good. I love how u compare things and how its some what. metephoric. Really good poem. "if ur reading this i love how u lie to me" this line seems to be screaming with pain andn makes me think ku want him to read it. Good job over all 5/5 ur best yet
Wow that was really powerful you could feel the emotion as you read it the structure it very well laid out the rythem is so steady you could dance to it as you read it the similes really capture the intense feelings that went into this poem and how you smoothly moved from season to season and the imagery is fantastic
10 years ago
Wow this is such a beuatiful poem. filled with sorrow but still so moving. i love those kind of poems. i especially liked the part about Romeo & Juliet. I for one am a big Shakspeare fan (he's my hero, my idol and my insperation) and the fact that you included that little snippet brings me closer to the poem. I love. 5/5. wonderful.
This was beautifully written. Various literary sources mixed in with a beautiful metaphoric sense and imagination to portray a simple sad emotion. With so many techniques you had used to explore it, you showed how much something affected you,and you did it wonderfully so. 5/5
It saddens me when I read a poem of such intent sorrow which is written by someone so young yet it also gladdens my heart that the poem is so well composed, a contradiction I know but true. That is why I gave you a 5/5 score. At nearly sixty one life to me has been so special I want everybody to have enjoyed what has past in it as much as I have, write us all a couple of fun or love poems that are warm and not chilling. Ray S
This is a very powerful poem.. i think your right when you said it was your best yet.. really well thought.. to what i think.. well first of all im deeply saddened.. cause if im right im the person this poem is to.. its a realy well put poem.. i love it.. sorry if my response to this poem is so short.. i dont really like to talk alot.. so forgive me.. k.. eye <3 u shanik.. i truly know this now..
First, I'd like thank you so much for you comment on my write.
This write of yours is quite powerful and filled with sorrow yet beautiful at the same time. The emotions just pour out pulling on the readers heartstrings causing them to feel the pain from within. The last stanza, for me personally, is my favorite and makes it a perfect ending...