My love untold

How will I tell you,about what I feel,
about a wound that over months wont heal,
the pain of which makes my heart to reel,
everyday, every night, I fight a losing battle,

*For the second line yu don't need the "over months' saying that it won't healis good enough. In the third line you spelled real wrong and you need another 'o' in to. Other than that good opening. The last line kind of sticks out though. I would try to make it match the others somewhow or lose it*

against wishes that my heart likes to cradle,
no matter how well I use my brains insight,
cant subdue thoughts that my heart feels right,
I can very well kill in my memory,

*You lost the flow here. You went from rhyming to not rhyming, that can distract readers from what the poem is really saying. I would change the third line to 'I can't subdue thoughts that my heart feels" And the last line is confusing, I don't really know what it means*

the thoughts about infatuations with many,
but never in my mind can I ever erase,
the divinity that reflects from your face,
how much I love you, you will never know,

*This is the best stanza, I didn't see any problems beside the unrhyming*

this feeling for you, I will dare not show,
I so loathe the way my fate has to be,
because you love someone and its not me,
my mind forbids but I accept it wholeheartedly,

*I would change the first line to "These feelings I feel for you, I dare not show" Sometimes you use excess words that take away from your emotions. I would change the second line to "I loathe the way my fate has to be" This stanza rhymes perfectly.Just work on not using so many extra words*

there is nothing I wish for than to see you happy,
from my voice you will never hear,
the calls of my soul to have you near,
in my eyes you will never see,

*The second line should start with "for" not 'from". See this stanza is like the first where only three lines rhyme. You gotta fix that hun. You have too many styles going on at one time*

the pain of my heart that fails to cease,
from my actions you will never learn,
deep within, the love for you that endlessly burns.

*I like this ending. It's simple but holds alot of emotions. I'm really sorry if this comment sounds mean, I just wan tot help. You have alot of good emotions, you just have to work on expressing them more clearly. Hope this helps hun. Nik*