Wake~Tanka

by Poet on the Piano   Jun 5, 2009


Arise from this curse,
oh princess of the valley,
Slumber no longer
suffocates your weary life,
You are free, now seek revenge.

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The Tanka is a form of Japanese poetry that consists of the
following syllables: 5, 7, 5, 7, 7.

Written For A Contest.

Thanks to Ingrid for some corrections.

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  • 16 years ago

    by mandy

    That was very beautiful. I love your choice of words and the idea of the poem. 5/5!

    -mandy :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Arise from this curse,
    oh princess of the valley
    Slumber no longer
    suffocates your weary life.
    You are free, now seek revenge.

    I think this would gain without some of the interpunction. I write mine without caps/ stops at all, but the way I did it here ^^ is already less than you had and I think it looks better on the page.

    I love the poem, btw..so creative, MaryAnne:)
    I hope she will not come after me, lol.

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

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