This was a very powerful tanka, it just stunned me! The whole poem came alive in front of my eyes and such imagery was portrayed. Your wording was deep and held my attention. A lovely write, this deserves front page. 5/5 from me, keep writing, always and forever....

~MaryAnne

"of crisp pale blossomed flowers"
`I think you may have overdone it a bit with the adjectives..

Other than that line, I thought the rest was very well written, great imagery painted through some of your words.

Well done.

Temps. :)

A lovely picture drawn with words. The flow
was smooth making this poem a beautiful
read...lovely!

Again, a very, very great piece. This was actually the first Tanka I have ever read, and I loved it. Very nicely done.