Celestial love...

by Exostosis   Jun 14, 2009


The sky a pitch black field,
on it the stars they burn so bright,
oh the luminosity and the esteem of it,
like a thousand tears,
from her face they have lit,
The nebulas they are so alluring,they surprise,
but they seem a lamp,
in front of the celestial glares in her eyes.
The frozen masses,they are so attractive,
but they fail to excite me,
when i see her beauty,
The comets,they are so always wandering,
just as she in her mind searching,
the rings of the planet,they encirle it,
but they seem nothing when i see her smile,
I talk of the moon,
and i talk of the sun,
but when i start to talk of her,
they all fail to burn.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Renegade Angel

    Breathtaking, powers of awesome and magic! I was perpleexed and taken back, Astrology is a creative way to portray deep love. Two thumbs up and a high five!

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    You painted a beautiful celestial portrait of love. It is a lovely picture indeed, taking love to a whole new plain of desires and meaning. I enjoyed this fantasy of pure adornment.

    Connie

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked it. The word usage was ok and the flow was good

    "The comets,they are so always wandering,"
    maybe
    "The comets, they are always wandering,"
    The "so" is not needed it doesn't sound right.

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    *Claps for you* This was such a beautiful piece of writing. If I didn't know you I could tell how deeply you love this girl just frrom your words here. The imagery is perfectly placed within your loose syntax. I really loved this poem. Keep on writing like this.You do it well. Nik

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