Darkness All Around Part 2

by ~* Joyful *~   Jun 13, 2004


My soul is flying free,
The air is turning clear.
I'm standing in heaven now,
God's voice i can only hear.

Do you want a life,
A chance to be re-born.
Or do you want to stay,
And watch your friends be torn?

I look at my arms,
The scars are still their.
The pain is still with me,
The pain i could not bear.

Everything is going grey,
The warmth has turned to cold.
I listen to what god is saying,
A sin i have done I'm told.

My hands begin to shake,
no-one can hear me cry.
I don't know what to do,
When i always seem to die.

My friends i start to hear,
Praying for my life.
I see them crowding round,
Holding my bloody knife..

(Paige asked me to write a sequel so that is what I have done.. please tell me what you think as I have never written any type of sequel before)

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  • 19 years ago

    by Danielle Riddle

    Joy, u have alot of talent, My Litarature teacher always told me that a person is a great writing, if they could make a blind person to see what their talkin about with all of their discriptions, and i think this poem has really done that, good job

    come and comment n some of mine sometime? if u want

  • 19 years ago

    by :( sydney ):

    very nice poem, keep up the great writing...come check out my poems sometime...:)

  • 19 years ago

    by TaTy

    Joyful,

    I loved your poem, and I also wanted to say thank you for commenting on of mine a while back... just haven't gotten around to thanking you all and seeing your poems... Keep writing I gave you a 5 =)

  • 19 years ago

    by David C

    haha.. so cool.. lol.. I told you people like your poems.. haha..

  • 19 years ago

    by Kristina K

    Very nice poem. Heartfelt and full of emotions. Great use of words and a very good flow. Keep up the wonderful work and I hope to read more. Take care always
    Kristina

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