by Lyssi Lori Jun 29, 2009
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
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Hush little baby, don't say anything more, |
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I really like it... it get ur point of not having a smooth flow...umm dont know y people kept repeating the same thing about the flow |
by Lyssi Lori
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Just so you guys know, this poem wasn't supposed to flow. It's a messed up poem about someone's messed up life. They don't flow very well, so I didn't want my poem to either. |
by Good Enough
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This poem has a good message but the flow is really rocky in some areas. Read it out loud and i think tht might help. Other than tht great job :) |