Emptiness

Great poem but there was a couple grammar and some sentence structure errors. 5/5

"but death ripped them apart, it took one love and left the other"

"She cries out to the heavens screaming, "Why God? What did i do for you to take the only thing in this sadden world that meant the world to me?"

love is cruel especially when one is taken by death...but screaming to God in most cases won't help, it's just how the world evolves, we all die eventually though we wish it wouldn't happen to our love one....we have to be strong and preserve our love and spirit in that person. though it can be challenging at first, we have to pull through...

"she takes a single blade to end her pain, her sorrow, the emptiness and the emotion of losing her lover & her best friend"

taking ones live isn't going to help either, would the one you love so dearly want you to take your own life? he would rather want you to live and love again...though he may not be by your side, he will be watching you from the heaven's above and protect you from any harm...

Once more very powerfull and sad and I know how u feel 5/5

Tammi,