Ribbons

Love the whole ribbon theme. Great symbolism. Love the meaning and the flow. great job. talented.

victoria

Very well done. I love the verses and each says so much. The colors have a great anology in the poems. Rhyme is as well done very well. over all great job :D.

As they said, I can't deny that I couldn't write such a poem at the young age of yours. Very suprise. I'm still a trainee in poem and I'm still practising on my rhyme and rythm so I won't touch the comment about this stuff. But I loved the way you use ribbon to express something as a symbol and its very symbolic. I personally a fan of symbolic user too. Besides I can feel the emotions and your symbol is quite strong. I like it! Not many people can write such level of poem at your age so Ima feel proud of you ^^ (cuz i'm one of 'em haha!) 5/5 hun!

I do not criticize. And i will not here.
Ive done the same thing, and felt really close to the same way if im understanding this. Not once have i ever heard a song or poem involve ribbons and self harm. Something that usually brings in happiness or reins in a special occasion meets a depressing topic such as self harm. ITs unique. And damn Rocky, you said it sucked!? Not only Harsh but just plain messed up.

Like rocky said, don't take my criticism badly, please.

I've been writing for a long time, like you, so I'll give you credit. You writing is good for your age.

I would suggest working on improving your rhythm and using more punctuation in your stanzas.

You topic is extremely cliche, lots of people have written about the same thing.

I can't tell you how many suicide or depression poems i've read, it's impossible. I'm not say you shouldn't write about this particular topic, I even have. I'm just saying that you should try to make your writing unique if you're going to write about an over-used topic. Be creative, surprise your audience.

Don't give up writing. Your foundation is good. Keep up the work and you'll be one of the best writers on this site in a few years.