by David johnson Sep 24, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
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How do i deal with the pain |
by Love Panda
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Im not keen on repetetiveness, and i think you have far too much of it. try breaking the poem up into stanzas, might be less noticable. the length is good as are the words you have used. ibe |
by SheenaMarie
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Love the repitition and flow in this write...5/5 |