You Followed Me.

by Stephanie   Sep 25, 2009


Oh so lovely, what a beautiful smile,
What a beautiful complexion of a boy.
Love mixed with complex tenderness,
Baby, just touch me one more time.
One. More. Time.

On some days my eyes hold a darkness,
full of a deep mystery that some fail to solve.
Yet suddenly, I feel hands reaching,
and I sense eyes searching through the unfound.
You see me. What happened to my darkness?

Muscles are indescribably tense.
This heart is constantly racing.
Thoughts aren't making sense.
Hands shake in disappointment.
And as you tell me to slow down...
I do.

Vulnerability is thrown out the window,
There's no need for such nonsense in here.
I've finally seen my sunshine in this darkness,
As I peek out of these windows that held me in.
-Light-

The light of a lover followed me;
Sunshine swims in every dark space.
You followed me through the troubles,
And you followed me through the dark.

I love you. <3
September 25, 2009
(c) Stephanie Lynn.

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  • 14 years ago

    by kelleyana

    "Oh so lovely, what a beautiful smile,
    What a beautiful complexion of a boy.
    Love mixed with complex tenderness,
    Baby, just touch".

    I think this stanza could be better. The start of a poem should always caught the reader eyes. Also could i think the word "complexion' uses in line one and two turns it off.

    "On some days my eyes hold a darkness,
    full of a deep mystery that some fail to solve.
    Yet suddenly, I feel hands reaching,
    and I sense eyes searching through the unfound.
    You see me. What happened to my darkness?
    It's the same for the second stanza. It seems it was forced." I feel hands reaching, and i sense eyes"....

    "Muscles are indescribably tense.
    This heart is constantly racing.
    Thoughts aren't making sense.
    Hands shake in disappointment.
    And as you tell me to slow down...
    I do". This is brilliant. You creates a vivid image.

    "Vulnerability is thrown out the window,
    There's no need for such nonsense in here.
    I've finally seen my sunshine in this darkness,
    As I peek out of these windows that held me in". Well it's good when we can finally see a light through the darkness. It tell there is hope.
    -Light-

    "The light of a lover followed me;
    Sunshine swims in every dark space.
    You followed me through the troubles,
    And you followed me through the dark".
    A great poem although i feel you rush it a bit. It merits 4.5/5