Unforgotten

by Second to None   Sep 27, 2009


Its been exactly a year
Which means 365 tears
Sence you were put six feet under
Why you took your life is a wonder

You were loved my everone
There was no reason for this being done
Every one has harships in life
So you took 13 pills and used a knife

365 days feels like yesterday
Every night for you i pray
That things are better for you now
And i will be with you soon, i vow

Until that day we meet at the white gate
All i can do is wait
One day soon i will be dressed in white cotton
Until that day you will not be forgotten

**this is a poem i entered in a contest**

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fear2love

    365 days feels like yesterday....
    best line ever :) 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Good rhyme and flow, change the first line like suggested by Kelly and it's really awesome

    5/5 JIMMY

  • 16 years ago

    by kelleyana

    This poem is very good apart from the first stanza, you need to edit it a bit.
    "You were loved my everone
    There was no reason for this being done
    Every one has harships in life
    So you took 13 pills and used a knife".

    I think you mean in the first line, " you were loved by everyone." Overall it touches the core of my heart with sadness. Well done, 5/5, kel.

  • 16 years ago

    by SolemnWish

    The entire poem gave me a tear
    but the ending made it fall it out
    the ending was amazing as was the entire poem

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