You kill me!! You say you can't write anything then you write this wonderful poem. You are funny. Anyways I love this. It's simple and really conveys your true feelings well. I love the diction as well. You always blow me away with your word choice. Keep them coming hun. Your talent is a rare one. *huggles* Nik

Well done. I think we all have a state of vexation in our lives at some time. It just takes time and things will clear and we will have the answer. Good job.

There is a sense of hopelesness in thos poem
that cries with frustration..hope you feel better..take care.

You're caught in an undertow Temps. Don't let it drag you farther out into depression and confusion.
Extremely well written with powerful emotion.
Jimmy

This poem is very sad, but you wrote it down very well what is going on inside of you.

Sometimes it's hard to take a distance, but still it is needed, because then you get the chance to overlook the whole situation and find a way to escape it.

I wish you luck on finding something that will help you overcome this stage in your life.

God bless:)

5/5 Ingrid

Temps
This is such a sad piece you have penned. Sometimes effect us so badly we can't let them go. you have expressed your feelings so well in this poem.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Very well written. It touches the heart. Nice lines indeed.

Loved it. especially the play on words...loved it

Beautiful writing i love it well done.

Great title! Really captured my attention.

"of life without meaning.
Severely damaging
eternal being,"
^I really enjoyed the eternal rhyme here. It was quite subtle and added a nice touch to the first stanza as a whole because it kept me interested to keep reading.

"to reverse sanity and afflict me
with psychosis for eternity."
^Great job with the rhyme here as well. I can see you trying new things and that its really good to see because you're growing as a poet with each poem.

"earthquake shaking thoughts
torrential tears develop a
raging monsoon."
^there seems to be a comma missing here...like this just runs out and left me out of breath. I liked your choice of words and as a whole the image you created was quite powerful but it just needs a little cleaning up technically.

"Hours are shredded"
^ I like that...never seen it said like that before.

"in silence and curiosity
of a solution. I'm quickly
falling from this extreme
height of vexation. "
^ I liked how you ended it with the subtle rhyme again...nice touch to tie the poem in together at the end!

I could really relate with your words here Temps...the emotion you evoked with your poem was quite outstanding and it hit home with me. I'm sure many have felt in that position once or twice in their life as well which makes it an even better read because many can find comfort in your words. It might have of been short, but it packed a punch and I sure did enjoy reading it.

Well done!
*5/5*

So sorry for my late comment Temps, I need to get back on track!

"Anxiety consumes years
of life without meaning.
Severely damaging
eternal being, threatening
to reverse sanity and afflict me
with psychosis for eternity."

Striking lines, very provoking words that spread truth to the soul.

"Plaguing of questions,
earthquake shaking thoughts
torrential tears develop a
raging monsoon."

Great use of adjectives here, some of these words are new to me, well at least "torrential" is in a way.

"Hours are shredded, lost
in silence and curiosity
of a solution."

This is a very relatable poem Temps, and that draws the connection to the reader and the poem ever so closely here. I liked "hours are shredded" that statement stated what you wanted to say very boldly.

"I'm quickly
falling from this extreme
height of vexation."

Wonderful display of your true emotions, another powerful poem by you.

5/5 from me, well worth the read, realistic and thought-provoking...

Keep smiling!

~MaryAnne