Departure*

by Freedom   Dec 16, 2009


If only
I've seen the signs.
His words fullfilled of
lies
Lost in his eyes
The not coming
sunrise
Irony in his smile
A joke in his words
(While telling "I love..")
Unsurness in his hug
I ignored
The feeling that we ran
out of luck.
Like a tourist
He only visited my heart
(And we torned apart).
While he decided to depart
(I know he found another station).
So i weigh back my anchor to the ship
All those aching memories I wish
to skip.
If only
I've seen the signs
Then probably I would have cancelled it from the start
Before we have to torn apart.
My Friend,I didn't know it hurts so much
To let go someone.
Even if he didn't love enough
To fight for our dangerous love.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    "If only
    I've seen the signs.
    His words fullfilled of
    lies
    Lost in his eyes
    The not coming
    sunrise"

    ^^ This poem could of been so much better if you could of portrayed your words so much better. It sounds odd the way it is. It really should be If only I'd seen the signs and his words were filled with lies or his words full of lies.

    THe rest of the poem was still good but the lines everyone seems to love "like a tourist he only visited my heart" i seem to not like these lines. THough noone has said it before it sounds a little cliche and cheesy. Still a decent write 4/5. Sorry if i seemed to harsh

  • 14 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This is such an interesting poem and form. The words and the way you've written them are different and unique.

    "Like a tourist,
    He only visited my heart." - LOVE these lines.

  • 14 years ago

    by Emily

    "Like a tourist
    He only visited my heart"

    LOVE those lines! very lyrical, good job!

    </3,
    em

  • 14 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Oh... its excellent... You write really awesome poem... I love your writing style... Keep up this good work (5/5)

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